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I live in Canada in a western part of this vast country where the winter lasts for more then six months! I love the country and its people. My country has wonderful lakes and the Rocky Mountains with famous Ice fields. Ice, that lasts for more then four hundred years. There are still wild life like Moose and Bears - And hunting and fishing is common... Ice hockey and ice dancing competitions are the most popular sports in Canada as well as the Calgary Stampede…Now more about me…My hobbies include writing, exercising, talking to friends, listening to my favourite singers Elvis Presley, Sarah Brightman, Enya, some old songs from 70 & 80 and all other kinds of music, and watching TV on occasion. I believe that writing poems is a very good way to express your own individual beliefs, feelings, and thoughts & I always like to make sure that what I write comes from the heart and not merely the mind. I have a wide range of thoughts and feelings to express in my poetry. The inspiration for the poems that I write comes from sources as diverse as listening to my favourite Gospel songs and music. I also like to be able to write poems that people can connect with and relate. I have had poems published in anthologies from the Noble House publishing as well as International Library of Poetry and received and an award for my writes. In the future I want to publish my own book with my own poems and short stories. I am charismatic, optimistic, romantic, passionate, loving, and caring. Enjoy life immensely. I am interested in surfing the Internet, healthy living, Yoga & Meditation, reading, watching movies and videos, writing short stories, poetry, tennis, traveling to warmer locations. Love Photography - Especially the Rocky Mountains...Watching sunsets & sunrises. Take great interest in Architecture, Archaeology, and Fine Arts! I have a special love for foreign Cultures' - Enjoy romantic dinners for two on occasion... Spending time with my family and friends as well as meeting new people... Appreciate honesty, loyalty, and respectfulness of themselves and others... Music & Poetry has been my greatest passion...Peace, Love and Happiness to All.
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SIMPLICITY

Many words can express
the simplicity of thought
this one, of great importance
"Namely, secure World Peace"
End the Wars-a noble wish.

We need Peace now
Freedom of speech
safety for children
when they are at school.

The Earth needs our love
urgently decrease
the level of pollution
treat Mother Earth
with dignity and respect.

This simplicity of thought
straight from the heart
these thoughts, each day,
occupy my mind.

There is also a great need
for Faith in God
rebuilt the Trust
among all Citizens
these are very simple
but important thoughts.


© 2008 Zuzanna


Last edited by Zuzanna on May 8, 2008, 3:17 pm
 
Francis Meyrick

Hi Zuzannah... you've been busy! How's your recovery going?
couple of suggestions...Smile

Many words can express
the simplicity of thought
this one of great importance
(maybe: this one IS of great importance
or: this one, of great importance)
Secure the World Peace
(maybe: "Namely, secure World Peace")
End the Wars-a noble wish.

We need the Peace now
(better: We need Peace now)
Also the Freedom of speech
(Also: Freedom of Speech)
Safety for children
When they are at school.

The Earth needs our love
in decrease of pollutions
(Maybe: to decrease the level of pollution)
Treat Mother Earth
With dignity and respect.

This simplicity of thought
straight from the heart
they are each day
(Maybe: these thoughts, each day,)
Occupy my mind.

There is also (A?) great need
for the Faith in God
(Better: for Faith in God)
Trust shall be rebuild
(rebuilt)
among all Citizens
these are very simple
But important thoughts.


Great Truths ARE basically simple, aren't they?

Grin


We little humans, hurtling through the Universe on our tiny, pale blue dot, will find few answers to Life's great mysteries. But we should at least find many of the questions. To write is to ask. To seek. To grope. With humility, and humor. Peace.
Posted on Thursday, May 8, 2008 at 12:15:55

 
Zuzanna

Hello Francis

Thank you so much for the suggestions
And for your time to evaluate.

I guess my mind was not working that great when writing this one.Speaking

Grin

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"Kindness, loyalty, appreciation and love, those are the finest ingredients in life"
By Zuzanna


Posted on Thursday, May 15, 2008 at 02:14:00

 
Francis Meyrick

No, your mind is working just fine. Don't worry. This is all small stuff.
Your creative instinct/vision is just great. All we're playing around with are tiny tricks of the trade, and minor grammar suggestions.
Don't be discouraged in any way... that's not what this is about. It's all about having fun and learning from each other.

Grin


We little humans, hurtling through the Universe on our tiny, pale blue dot, will find few answers to Life's great mysteries. But we should at least find many of the questions. To write is to ask. To seek. To grope. With humility, and humor. Peace.
Posted on Friday, May 23, 2008 at 08:57:56

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